[Disclaimer: Contains lyrics and works from Katy Perry's Hot and Cold. All rights belong to their respective owners, and I stand to receive NO funds from this publication. Publication is for entertainment purposes only]
'You're hot then you're cold,
You're yes then you're no,
You're in then you're out,
You're up then you're down,
You're wrong when it's right,
It's black then it's white,
We fight, we break up,
We kiss, we make up'
Now we never really fight like Perry says/
But we're always up and down, like Vicki says/
I don't know what it is/ why I go from hot to cold like this/ one minute I'm in with both feet/ next I want out, my mind has got me beat/ it's a T.K.O/ against my heart/ i know/ i love you but that's not the point/ i'm petrified that i'll disappoint/ you, so i push you away/ but i won't delay/ in telling you that there will be no foul play/ no, i will not stray/ while we're together, it'll always be valentines day/ i'll shower you with gifts without complaint/ and when we go out, i'll always pay/ becuase, without saying it in a overly elaborate way/ i want you to feel like a princess if that's okay?/ cuz you make me feel like a paddy on st. patrick's day/ and i think of you from the break of day/ 'til the end of play/ and i'll always be there in every which way/ forever and a day/ i'll do my best to kick my head into touch and be there to stay/ i'll be there with that 'S'/ on my chest/ but i'm Vitamin K/ no need to eat spinach with me about, i'll be stood at the end of your driveway/ holding a bouquet/ that moment exists in my dreams/ 'cuz right now i feel like i've run out of steam/ it's like i'm fighting a war with one hand tied behind my back/ i don't know why/ but sometimes/ i just prefer a lack/ of contact/ sometimes/ i just want space but i hate feeling like that/ i wanna be your Superman, Spiderman and Batman rolled into one/ i wanna be the one you dream of/ wanna be the one you think of late at night when you can't get to sleep/ wanna be the one you run to/ wanna be the one who won't ever hurt you/ i want to be able to hand you that ring on one knee and it be forever/ through sunny or stormy weather/ i need someone to talk to and that person is Vicki/ I need therapy and she/ is my therapist/ she/ helps me see/ what i'm blind to but, you're not/ 'cuz you're all that i want and all that i got/ i just need time to get over it/ and we just need time to work on our relationship.../
i like how you've done this. i don't quite know how to critique, but the message is loud and clear. totally understandable from beginning to end. good way with words, i don't know how you do it, wish i could. love all your work =] x
ReplyDeleteTo "critique" you just be honest, tell the writer what is good and what is bad. Talk about things like flow, rhyme, imagery etc etc... But most importantly you MUST be honest. Thanks for your comments, they are appreciated :D
ReplyDeletewell it flows well, rhyme...maybe i'm not too sure lol. i can imagine you sat there thinking and writing this, and can imagine feeling like that. HONEST. x
ReplyDeleteIt definitely does rhyme! the /'s emphasise the rhymes lol thanks :)
ReplyDeleteohhhhhh! hehe :P x
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